Story - The Butler Did It
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Blue-Cynthia
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Re: Story - The Butler Did It
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esercito sconfitto
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Re: Story - The Butler Did It
"Heartfelt City" ? 
some details don't go unnoticed
Trackman's town is a crowded place right now!
wonderful short tale!
some details don't go unnoticed
Trackman's town is a crowded place right now!
wonderful short tale!
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Charlie06
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Re: Story - The Butler Did It
Nice little story. Flowed very well with the right amount of action in it to read like a spy thriller. Great job.
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Trackman281
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I'm really pleased to see the second part posted as I was wondering when and hey, don't worry about being lazy. It can happen to us all.
I really like the way, you pay close attention to all the detail about Naomi getting changed into Anna's uniform. It's just the small things, like having Naomi quickly brush off any lint that may have gotten onto the uniform, so she looks smart and professional. I like these little details and I think you did a tremendous job with highlighting this.
I also liked that Naomi even took Anna's earrings, just to be on the safe side unless her cover gets blown.
I loved the takedown of Maya, it was one of those off screen takedowns, that has the "less you see is more effective" approach. Because all we know is that Maya has been taken down, yet it's what we don't fully see that actually makes it quite sexy. So brilliant job on that.
Thank you!
.........You know, if Naomi ever happens to find herself in Heartfelt City at any point in the future, she's always welcome. All she ever needs to do is ask. 
Honestly, though thank you for giving my world a shout out, it was unexpected, but it was greatly appreciated, it really was, and I said above. Heartfelt City is always open for new infiltrators and new agents, plus it seems that "GHOST" has a rough idea as to whom is operating in Heartfelt City. Goodness, it seems that the "Nine Sisters" are truly becoming well known. If Naomi ever needs help in going after anyone in Heartfelt. I'm sure she'll have allies IF she needs them.
All in all, this was a fantastic short story and it was really nice to see the second part. I hope you decide to write future stories as this one was really enjoyable and I know that you are someone who enjoys exploring ideas of uniforms that have never been stolen before, so I can't wait to see what else you might think of. Brilliant work!
I really like the way, you pay close attention to all the detail about Naomi getting changed into Anna's uniform. It's just the small things, like having Naomi quickly brush off any lint that may have gotten onto the uniform, so she looks smart and professional. I like these little details and I think you did a tremendous job with highlighting this.
I also liked that Naomi even took Anna's earrings, just to be on the safe side unless her cover gets blown.
I loved the takedown of Maya, it was one of those off screen takedowns, that has the "less you see is more effective" approach. Because all we know is that Maya has been taken down, yet it's what we don't fully see that actually makes it quite sexy. So brilliant job on that.
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Thank you!
.........You know, if Naomi ever happens to find herself in Heartfelt City at any point in the future, she's always welcome. All she ever needs to do is ask. Honestly, though thank you for giving my world a shout out, it was unexpected, but it was greatly appreciated, it really was, and I said above. Heartfelt City is always open for new infiltrators and new agents, plus it seems that "GHOST" has a rough idea as to whom is operating in Heartfelt City. Goodness, it seems that the "Nine Sisters" are truly becoming well known. If Naomi ever needs help in going after anyone in Heartfelt. I'm sure she'll have allies IF she needs them.
All in all, this was a fantastic short story and it was really nice to see the second part. I hope you decide to write future stories as this one was really enjoyable and I know that you are someone who enjoys exploring ideas of uniforms that have never been stolen before, so I can't wait to see what else you might think of. Brilliant work!
