Story - The Butler Did It

[Blue-Cynthia]

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[esercito sconfitto]

welcome to the writer's corner , Blue-Cynthia


PS poor Anna

[Trackman281]

Brilliant work. I loved the takedown of poor Anna. Tricking her with a supposedly broken TV. Nicely done.

It was a really good Introduction to Naomi and I enjoyed discovering about her employer Ghost

All in all, I love the setting, it was a very enjoyable first part and I really am looking forward to seeing the second part.

Also congratulations as I believe you are the first person to have an airline butler be replaced. So nice work in discovering a new type of uniform to steal.

Amazing job!

[rufusluciusivan]

I concur. Congratulations for your first story.

Nice way to introduce your character and setting, short but with enough details. Same for the descriptions.

I appreciated a lot some of the details that added to the realism, especially how you mention that Naomi checked that the butler would be female, how you take into consideration the precise time left that Naomi ha,s and the idea of not bothering with tying up someone if you know the knock-out serum will keep them out of commission long enough. A way to set the scene apart. Plus, it's realistic.

USBair... There are some things you can't make up...

[Charlie06]

Congrats on your first story post and welcome to the Stories and Excerpts section. Really enjoyed this read. Waiting for more, story has a lot potential. I've written a spy story or two if you ever need help with anything let me know. Again great start and eagerly waiting for the rest.

[Torreken]

Congrats! A very suggestive start.

[Blue-Cynthia]

Esercito - Poor Anna indeed and nice of you to include a picture of an airline butler.

For reference, the butler in particular is mostly based on the one you see here: https://youtu.be/1R2sOr6vZqo?t=449
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Trackman - Thank you for the review, my friend. I'm glad you liked the introduction! And indeed once again, this might be the first time a butler disguise is used in a USB scenario.
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rufusluciusivan - Thank you. I appreciate your liking of the introduction, details, and descriptions. I used to write short stories, or fanfictions, rather, a few years ago so I thought I'd put that expertise to good use for once.

Truth be told, I couldn't think of an airline name and I didn't want to use a real one so why not make a clear reference to the board?
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Charlie06 and Torreken - Thank you two as well!
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I want to add a disclaimer that this is only intended to be a short story and the butler uniform is the only disguise used. The second half will be added soon.

[Charlie06]

It's funny you mentioned that particular airline butler as your inspiration when I read the story that was the one I was thinking of from that very video.

[FeMilImpos]

Nice job on this. I can’t wait for the next one!

[tirepanted3]

Welcome aboard, Blue-Cynthia. Always good to see a new writer on here.

A good intro to the main character, concise descriptions, adherence to detail, and to top it off, a well done USB scene. I like how confident Naomi is in the potency of her knockout drug that she doesn't even bother to bind and gag Anna.