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suggestions for my new story rookie infiltration

Posted: Mon May 02, 2022 4:01 pm
by dummy76
hi guys,

appreciate any suggestions or comments you may have

Re: suggestions for my new story rookie infiltration

Posted: Tue May 03, 2022 7:01 am
by pc305435632
I like lethal version

Re: suggestions for my new story rookie infiltration

Posted: Tue May 03, 2022 7:11 am
by pc305435632

Re: suggestions for my new story rookie infiltration

Posted: Tue May 03, 2022 11:06 am
by pc305435632
19:20 start https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HlqpnCXzIRo
I saw a plot worthy of reference.A group of soldiers were running. Assassins killed them one by one from behind and finally put on their uniforms.
Replace the male soldiers of World War II in the TV series with modern female soldiers , They were running , so their uniforms will be smelling of her sweat , their socks will be wet .

Re: suggestions for my new story rookie infiltration

Posted: Tue May 03, 2022 11:46 am
by dummy76
thank you!! love these

Re: suggestions for my new story rookie infiltration

Posted: Thu May 05, 2022 2:19 am
by dummy76
i added an installment if you read the story. i particularly enjoyed writing how the senior trainee yana was finished off. hope you found it creative and fun

Re: suggestions for my new story rookie infiltration

Posted: Thu May 05, 2022 5:18 am
by pc305435632
dummy76 wrote: Thu May 05, 2022 2:19 am i added an installment if you read the story. i particularly enjoyed writing how the senior trainee yana was finished off. hope you found it creative and fun
thank you :D

Re: suggestions for my new story rookie infiltration

Posted: Thu May 05, 2022 5:47 am
by pc305435632
When the camera turns elsewhere, the guard is subdued and hung up. When the camera turns back, the guard will still be standing.

Re: suggestions for my new story rookie infiltration

Posted: Thu May 05, 2022 10:12 am
by dummy76
that's actually a smart idea. but her colleagues patroling would certainly notice something wrong.

Re: suggestions for my new story rookie infiltration

Posted: Thu May 05, 2022 11:50 am
by pc305435632
dummy76 wrote: Thu May 05, 2022 10:12 am that's actually a smart idea. but her colleagues patroling would certainly notice something wrong.
You can put the plot of "finding the body" at the end of the story, and the protagonist is preparing to evacuate at this time.
Designing the plot of "the body was found" means that we can describe the appearance of the body at this time.
for example, "piss-stained pants"