Chapter 16: Blink And You'll Miss Me

rufusluciusivan
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Re: Chapter 16: Blink And You'll Miss Me

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What were potentially seeing is Soph going through various stages of grief before her eventual redemption, Soph is still young, she felt like she was all alone, then Tina gave her hope and became her first true, then unfortunately Kuebiko came along and really poisoned Soph's mind against Tina making her believe that it was all Tina's fault that she ended up in the situation she did. I'd say Soph is currently at her darkest and as you know it's always darkest before the dawn. :D
Then, I'm curious to see what will happen next. I'll be honest, this was more sharing a personal opinion here, because the writing leading to this development is good and justified. I realized that, over time, I tend to become more and more uncompromising with fictional characters and I tend to quickly give up on them when they do certain things I reprove - such as swearing revenge on someone who didn't do anything wrong while the real culprit is pretty obvious. I guess it's also linked to the fact that we mostly see things through Tina's eyes: we saw how Soph's disappearance affected her and we know how she feels, so we know how unfair it is to blame her and to say that she considers her sisters as 'playthings', but Soph didn't. No, scratch that, I'm impatient (anxious?) to see how things will evolve! ;)
Trackman281
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Re: Chapter 16: Blink And You'll Miss Me

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Tirepanted - As you know I accept any tips, hints or criticism as that helps me improve and make the next chapters more enjoyable, because at the end of the day while Yes I love writing stories, but if nobody enjoys them then it can just feel strange if you know what I mean. :D

Funny you should say that though as that is one thing I even feel I need to work on as I sit there sometimes and think "hhhmmm, that doesn't look right." But I apparently still keep it anyway haha. :)

Rufusluciusivan - Soph is also potentially lashing out, she's still young, this was her first real encounter with an adversary that made her feel, well let's be honest weak and helpless, she's probably very angry and in someway her mind is probably struggling greatly to come to make reality of it all, so it's forcing to think irrationally, their world can be a big and unforgiving place and unfortunately Soph has had to find this out at a very early stage in her life, plus it wouldn't surprise me if she blamed Tina for not killing Kuebiko during their first encounter because then the second encounter would of never happened.......But Tina didn't, the second encounter did happen and I have feeling Soph probably knows that Kuebiko (while now captured) is still alive after all that, so that's probably forced Soph's mind to jump to these rapid conclusions so quickly. :)

You'll see more of Soph VERY soon. ;)
meditions142
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Re: Chapter 16: Blink And You'll Miss Me

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Trackman,

While I already commented on this wonderful story, I was actually reading it again and realized I had forgotten to comment on something else I really enjoyed in the story. That is Libido's whip.

I love the idea that it has multiple settings including two to knock out a victim and one to induce pleasure.

As I mentioned in my prior post I really enjoyed the scene where Libido captured the blonde haired guard with the whip. However, I find it very interesting that Libido chose to knock the woman out with a judo chop instead of one of the knockout features of the whip. She had the guard trapped by the whip and could have easily given her a static shock or a dose of the knockout gas. Maybe the whip has limited uses of its features and she didn't want to waste them.

Anyway, love the whip and would love to see it in future stories!
Trackman281
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Re: Chapter 16: Blink And You'll Miss Me

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She needs to use the gadgets on her whip wisely, they only have one shot per use so she'd need time to recharge them, I guess she thought seeing as how she already had the guard right where she wanted her, she thought it would be best if she kept them just in case she needed them again. ;) :)

I'm sure I can bring Libido and her whip back in a story soon for you, I just need to shall we say, "calm" her down a little bit before I send her back out into the field. :D 8-)

Plus as you may or may not have seen with chapter 17, the Phantoms are drawing nearer and nearer, so soon it will be all hands on deck. :D
meditions142
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Re: Chapter 16: Blink And You'll Miss Me

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Trackman281 wrote: Fri Nov 06, 2020 1:59 pm

I'm sure I can bring Libido and her whip back in a story soon for you, I just need to shall we say, "calm" her down a little bit before I send her back out into the field. :D 8-)
Well I do understand that. However, it wouldn't be too bad to see her do more things like she did with the guard in this story! I do have to say that is one of my favorite guard uniform steals I've ever read.
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